Demand masonry?
Take your hallow threats elsewhere
Madrid will be mine.
Pulled an all-nighter
before a three hour class
—Civilization
In my morning grog
I hunt for a pop machine.
School of management.
Vault energy drink
seventy-eight grams of sugar?
Bottled heart attack.
Thirty minutes pass
before I realize
I'm not listening.
Very abruptly
puts on her denim jacket...
She must have noticed.
Ten minute break.
I ponder leaving early;
the angel prevails.
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Vault energy drink
seventy-eight grams of sugar?
Bottled heart attack.
Thirty minutes pass
before I realize
I'm not listening.
Very abruptly
puts on her denim jacket...
She must have noticed.
Oh man, so good, especially the last one
Thirty minutes pass
before I realize
I'm not listening.
Alex, honey, that's 555...maybe 565, but that's stretching it.
It's 565.
But the 575 rule isn't a rule. It's a guidline. If breaking it will make a stronger haiku than it's acceptable. I write alot of haiku that are one sylable too long or too short. I could change the middle line to "By the time I realize" but I thought it was better this way.
you're right - 575 is rule , it's a LAW. That 'haiku' doesn't count.
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